Crucify!

Category: Writers Block

Post 1 by metal angel (Help me, I'm stuck to my chair!) on Sunday, 21-Sep-2008 2:18:35

I am shamed and am blamed for a crime I didn't commit.
They hate me for my purity, they hate me for my innocence.
A thousand people gather round, maybe two thousand, maybe more.
Some think its justice, but most want blood and gore.
They geer at me and shout, "Crucify! Crucify!"
"He's no innocent, die, die, die!"
My hands and feet are nailed to a cross. They already see blood loss.
They beat me, whip me, and spit in my face.
They curse the ones around me, and laugh at my father's name.
I can feel the brutality, I feel the blood flow and pain.
But I don't speak a word for Heaven's a great gain.
My brutalized blood stained body is now placed in a tomb.
They hope I'll rot in hell and suffer impending doom.
But at this I laugh for its nothing but lies. For three days later, I ascend to Heaven, and rise!
I am the one who conquered the grave! And Jesus Christ is my name!

Post 2 by Nicky (And I aprove this message.) on Friday, 26-Sep-2008 2:11:25

love it who ever wrote it has done an awesome job, verry good.

Post 3 by metal angel (Help me, I'm stuck to my chair!) on Saturday, 27-Sep-2008 2:46:26

Thanks! I wrote that myself. Please spread the word so others can see.

Post 4 by OceanDream (An Ocean of Thoughts) on Saturday, 27-Sep-2008 3:06:49

Nice one. I like the wording of it. It creates very strong imagery.

Post 5 by metal angel (Help me, I'm stuck to my chair!) on Saturday, 27-Sep-2008 13:28:54

Thanks. I did that so people could see that even though it wasn't pretty, it had a good ending in the end.

Post 6 by Gracesong (Zone BBS is my Life) on Saturday, 06-Dec-2008 21:38:39

I agree with the others. Very vivid imagery.

Post 7 by alison (my ISP would be out of business if it wasn't for this haven I live at) on Saturday, 06-Dec-2008 21:39:34

No kidding. This is your best one, IMO. The rhythm, rhyming scheme, and imagery were all great. Good job.

Alison

Post 8 by metal angel (Help me, I'm stuck to my chair!) on Saturday, 06-Dec-2008 21:46:01

Like I said, thanks and spread the word around.

Post 9 by alison (my ISP would be out of business if it wasn't for this haven I live at) on Saturday, 06-Dec-2008 22:37:20

Sure thing, no problem.

Post 10 by penguin girl is happy feet (Newborn Zoner) on Sunday, 04-Jan-2009 4:06:19

That post is very touching to the heart and just thinking about it makes me eealize that know one on this earth is perfect but the one who is, is Jesus.